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Hey Sarg - Other than a snapshot of someone that we cannot at all discern is an ex-wife from the poem, did you want to incorporate some longer lasting effect ...

Hi Jagged - Been meaning to review this for a time, as you know. Actually, I hardly think it needs a review, since it is so beautifully written. There is ...

This latest was just about to begin growing on me until the latter half, whereupon it summarised the main idea too quickly. I'll start off by saying that I liked ...

Hi Galerius - I think I have read this poem too many times. I dreamed of it recently. That is the downfall of a photographic memory and an insatiable curiosity. ...

Hi Kylan - I wondered when I would get to review a fiction piece of yours. I don't think I have, so far - although I have read pieces. Revenant ...

I'm going to give this a detailed, specific review first, and then talk about the bigger picture. I think I'll just do this in the order the story is told, ...

This is primarily a humorous piece again, all monologue, so I can hardly give it a proper review. Actually, I found this rather creepy - not at all funny like ...

*cough cough* Remind me what the point of this is? You hate Adobe Reader. Fine. We get that from the first couple of lines. That's a statement, not a poem. ...

Haha, it's so strange how these things snowball off...I've actually seen some other rather humorous pieces on YWS lately, so this further made my day :D. I don't think, though, ...

This is ridiculous. And it is ridiculously funny, told the way they are. (And you say you do not write with 'intent' - I see plenty of that here: you ...

Tim - I will begin with the story you want to convey: that of a boy dead by (lung cancer, I assume, from) smoking. Firstly, what emotion do you want ...

I certainly appreciate that you are aiming for greater overall coherency in this poem in terms of interweaving your ideas. I must say, you have not let your images run ...

Since this is for a contest and since this is a poem, I'm going to approach it a little differently. I'm all for the content-as-well-as-style type of reviewing, and I ...

Hey! I skim read the third chapter, and from what I can tell, it's looking much neater now. Good work! I just happened to notice one thing (and remind me ...

This is surprisingly chilling, considering the way it is written. Perhaps that's what makes it so chilling. That child's tone, that naivete, that absolute innocence. One might call this, then, ...