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I like your overall intention to portray insensitivity to others, without meaning to. I also think you tackled the matter in the expected way: coldenss - and though this might ...

Thanks Kylan and bubblewrapped - I'll see what I can do about the first part in 'Middle Ground' and I'll keep in mind what you're saying, bubblewrapped, about the imagery. ...

Hey ScarlettFire (hope I spelt that right), you live just over the ditch from me (I'm in NZ - way cooler, literally speaking). I'm super curious to know what way ...

Do you think it might be characteristic of writers to not be avid TV watchers? I know I can't stand TV, simply because I cannot sit still long enough to ...

Nice names, and I too, love that acronym. I look forward to reading your '20 stories in progress' sometime. And poetry, too - are you doing NaPoWriMo? And how on ...

Hello Mira! I relate to a lot of things you have said. I have written since I learnt to write. I have played an instrument and loved it to death ...

I like this poem, but found it difficult to read. Both because it's written in small text, and because it's all crammed together. Definitely space it out nicely. The feeling ...

Overall, the poem has a sweet, mellow taste, but lacks a certain powerful flavour, that totally blasts my mouth and leaves me reeling back. I think it's to do with ...

Just like to say that I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem first time round - such pretty imagery, such an inventive use of words - but like Hypocrit, I agree ...

Other than 'Ode to Pancakes,' this is one of the funniest poems I have read in a long time, so I thank you for the entertainment. Almost a Robbie Burns, ...

Hey Clo! Good to see you're doing NaPo and catching up on missed poems - I was doing that a couple of days ago, too. I am in love with ...

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Thank you for all your comments. They have been very helpful, and I've started making changes. Have a look! Demeter - I see where you're coming from with the 'list-like' ...

Overall, I liked this poem. Yes, same as you, I don't like rhyming poetry - it's hard to be original, and easy to come up with the same old cliche ...

With regards to your latest one - the 'ghost town' idea IS cliche, and so is everything we expect to see in this ghost-town. advice to you is to remove ...