Navita

Wow, well, I feel like TheNewHero has really done all the work for me. He talked about letting the EMOTION of the work get out - which is REALLY hard, ...

Good flow, especially in the beginning. I'm not sure you're aware, but your poem lines follow a pattern of syllables like this: 2, 4, 8, 6, 8, 1, 7, 1, ...

First up, 'high up in the air' is not the most original line to begin with. perdido said end with a bang, and I will add to that: begin with ...

This. Is. Flipping. Amazing. Such a powerful, and lyrical description of getting braces - you make it come to life before my eyes, oh, oh, oh - My mouth. A ...

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National Poetry Writing Month

Good title, and this is a thought-provoking poem. It flows well, but I think it would do better in three sections - one at the start depicting the CURRENT (crappy) ...

Am browsing around quickly, so only had a look at the latest one - I like the way it begins, all in action, with good flow - but try not ...

I do not think todays poem is a 'sheer suck' at all! I like your flow, as ever, and what I like more is the idea behind your poem. Keeping ...

For me...the 'don't soak me in honey, kill me in poison' part was the most vivid. I think you know that this poem is very raw, and I know that ...

Oh, oh, oh ! This is very talented, and - don't ask me why - this makes me feel like it is a globe-poem (even I have no idea what ...

Other people have said this doesn't read like poetry. I beg to differ - it does: the tone of your voice, your word choice, and line strucutre - short, sharp ...

Oh...what can I say. It was beautiful, it was perfect, and yeah, I know my comments are sounding SO cliche; oh, that's the other thing - your poem was so ...

This is...a butterfly of a short story. I love it. I love the way it starts in the middle of their conversation, but the fact that that conversation is so ...

I liked the flow, as usual, but I actually didn't feel very interested while reading this poem at all - which is strange, because I know you are generally so ...