Navita

Hi - I'm not going to be nit-picky about commas and such, since to me they matter less than what you've actually written. From the outset, I really love this ...

I like a good mystery...let me guess - at first, you're talking about a ship, right? Or a boat of some sort? I assume that because you say you'll tether ...

First thing that goes through my mind when reading this is that it is primarily made up of short, literal sentences, and little or no imagery. You have clearly got ...

Okay, so I promised I'd rethink this latest one. Firstly, do I really need to repeat that this is amazing imagery? Every line is new and interesting and fresh and ...

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Hi Winter - I'm Navita, and I'm new too, but since I joined about a week ago, I guess I'm a little 'older' than you. Good to see you know ...

Day 11, Poem 1 was too direct for my liking from the outset - maybe you were rushed, so the metaphors and imagery were lacking, and the 'truth' was a ...

Glad you found it useful, and good luck for that writing competition. Now, just about this ambiguity/confusion/mystery/leave-it-unclear-for-the-audience thing - it does not work perfectly well, in my

Well, Kylan and Clo, between you two, you have certainly managed to 'shatter it in a sweeping cascade of sharps' with regards to the poem! Thank you - once again ...

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As a poem, I definitely enjoyed it - it seemed quite spaced out for a poem, but that's alright. You use some amazing imagery - 'silhouette mocking daybreaks,' 'watching lightmold ...

Hey Elinor - I like the sweet simplicity of your poems, and how they are bite-sized, but I only wish you'd write them a little longer! I know, I'm contradicting ...

This story - may I call it that? a recount is a better word, I think - is told very entertainingly indeed. I was hooked when I started to read ...

This. Is. Fantastic. I LOVE reading about science when it's under the mask of poetry - it adds such a strange layer to it all! And you have pulled it ...

Main comment here is that I LOVED the image of him chasing lightning - it's actually quite new and fresh, so that's why I enjoyed it. However, the rest of ...