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This is great - showing not telling, and going beyond that - I definitely agree with it. I have not browsed around this forum for long enough to know what ...

Yes! I LOVED this latest poem of yours! I liked the subtle rhyme - so Shakespearean - and the mindpower involved in actually figuring out there was one. The diction ...

I was unsure what I'd say about this latest poem of yours - I mean, what more can you say, than the perfect poem is, well, perfect? - so I ...

As a non-fan of television, I was curious to see what you'd come up with. At the end of the day, I found the poem about TV bland and kind ...

It's strange, but I'd think, at first read, that the character in this poem is not really that captivating - somehow, she is, she is. I'm curious about this woman ...

Thanks Jigster; and don't let anyone's terrifically long commentary stop you from the sweet and simple 'I like this!' I appreciated that you spent some time using a few more ...

I, too, confess that I have been lurking around this thread saying very little, but delighting to read in your NaPo poetry. It's time to put that into words :) ...

Hey Emily - welcome to YWS. Like you, I joined the site just recently (maybe about 7 or 8 days ago), but in that time, I've managed to figure out ...

Hola Richela! I joined about seven days ago, and, to be perfectly honest, just from reading your lengthy and beautifully thought-out answers to everyone else's questions, I can tell we're ...

Kylan - the botanist or depetaling a metaphor Yes, that was everything I was telling you not to do, and you went ahead and did it, with the intention to ...

Yes! Glad you liked them, Kylan, and yes, the writewritewrite thing has gone out the window.

I am in love with the 11th poem - immediately, it strikes me with that gripping first line, so sweet in its simplicity. A charming image: You are the girl ...

It hooks me as soon as I read the first line. The intensity, the drama, the mystery is heightened by the use of 'you.' HOwever, the beginning would benefit from ...

The poem is small and sweet, with little bite-sized stanzas - much like a butterfly itself. However, that means that you've got to phrase everything in such a way that ...

Hey fizza! It turns out I was just reading something else on the topic of 'identity' and something about this hedgehog poem got to me. Peel back some spikes, some ...