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Hey Rachel! Firstly, I think that starting it with a passive line was a bit strange, since I thought you'd be recounting the story to us in the past tense ...

Hey, critiquing art and photography isn't my forte, but I simple had to say that this was an intriguing picture. What exactly IS it??? (Nah, don't tell me - it'll ...

I LOVED the opening line. I am a big fan of a good 'hook' in a story, and it worked well here - It was a cold day, the sort ...

Hi Nyiiri! Well, I always wondered what style of writing goes into General Fiction - and clearly, it's just about everything. Okay, I'll review this in reverse to how I ...

The title was certainly intriguing - so well done on creating an enticing title (not that I judge a poem by it; but it DOES make it all the more ...

I just wanted to say that your opening line was brilliant: With foreign dust on my shoulders This is intriguing - without being over-the-top imaginative and hard for us to ...

Hey Jagged! Good to see some more of your work - and I have to say: I LOVE poems about physics (I enjoy physics, and I think there's a certain ...

Heya - Kyerra, the character (or the person) and the narrator (you, perhaps?) certainly have an intriguing relationship, and I think it would be better if you dwelt for longer ...

Hey, just from a quick skim read, I can tell that TenYo makes for a very interesting person! However, because he is so interesting, I'd suggest breaking up his separate ...

Overall impression: it's tight, it's coiled, it leaves us feeling on the 'edge'. There is great sense of tension and a feeling of being wound-up in this, even in the ...

I have always loved Jodi Picoult's writing, and it's a pity I have read everything she has written to date! Some favourites included Nineteen Minutes, The Pact and Salem Falls ...

Absolutely nothing. I cannot write with music on - I prefer absolute silence. Which explains why I cannot write straight on to a computer or in the kitchen, where the ...

I agree with Jagged - my family is half-serious, but they think there's far more interesting things to be doing than writing. All my English teachers know the real story ...

Sargsauce - thanks for the advice, and to answer your Q; I am a person on the sidelines of the skating rink in the first poem. And 'butterfly' DOES tie ...

Hi Bridget! I was really excited to join a little over a week ago, too! But I can't say I agree with you on the maths.:D And yeah, I love ...