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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Forgetting Names

    Wow. I don't think I found any grammatical errors except for ‘It’s not going to me like that this time. ’ I promised her. I couldn't find any faults in ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Your Coward

    That was a great peice of writing, everything was structured perfectly and flowed beautifully, in my opinion. The only mistakes I could find were: I placed my hands into my ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Torn Paper

    It may have been one big rant, but at least it was interesting. I couldn't find any problems regarding grammar, but I think a few peices could be rephrased to ...

    Apr 21, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: No Name

    I really loved this peice, it is full of emotion and meaning (in a strange way). I know what you mean about Patrick Ness, after reading his books I found ...

    Apr 21, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Prologue- Iris Carter

    Wow, I absolutely love it. From the fist sentence I was totally immersed, I always struggle to find a good opener but you have really got it perfect. This peice ...

    Jan 9, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Literally Crazy

    hi, okay, your giving a lot of information in quite big chunks at the start. Spread it out a bit. Her blondish black hair was untied and she was wearing ...

    Dec 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Chiharu~2

    Hi I'm Nats and I'm going to try and review this as best as I can. I found the start slightly odd, at first I wasn't sure what to think, ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Apocalyptic Fate - Alone?

    Hi, I've not really done many reviews but, obviously, I need to start somewhere so I'll give it my best shot. I really do love the idea of this. For ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Of Wild Flowers-chapter 1

    This starts off incredibly well. I can really see everything happening. One of the bits I found slightly confusing was when you said: The baby seemed to have stopped whimpering, ...

    Mar 25, 2010


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