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  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Forgetting Names

    Wow. I don't think I found any grammatical errors except for ‘It’s not going to me like that this time. ’ I promised her. I couldn't find any faults in ...

    Jun 15, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Your Coward

    That was a great peice of writing, everything was structured perfectly and flowed beautifully, in my opinion. The only mistakes I could find were: I placed my hands into my ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Torn Paper

    It may have been one big rant, but at least it was interesting. I couldn't find any problems regarding grammar, but I think a few peices could be rephrased to ...

    Apr 21, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: No Name

    I really loved this peice, it is full of emotion and meaning (in a strange way). I know what you mean about Patrick Ness, after reading his books I found ...

    Apr 21, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Prologue- Iris Carter

    Wow, I absolutely love it. From the fist sentence I was totally immersed, I always struggle to find a good opener but you have really got it perfect. This peice ...

    Jan 9, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Literally Crazy

    hi, okay, your giving a lot of information in quite big chunks at the start. Spread it out a bit. Her blondish black hair was untied and she was wearing ...

    Dec 23, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Chiharu~2

    Hi I'm Nats and I'm going to try and review this as best as I can. I found the start slightly odd, at first I wasn't sure what to think, ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Sunlight's Darkness Prologue

    Thanks for the comments, I'll take these all into concideration. I'm very glad it did just what I wanted, the whole point of this was for it to be mysterious, ...

    Dec 20, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Sunlight's Darkness Prologue

    Just something I put together to start of something that I hope, for once, I might finish. The barman waited a few moments for the customer to get a proper ...

    Dec 19, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Apocalyptic Fate - Alone?

    Hi, I've not really done many reviews but, obviously, I need to start somewhere so I'll give it my best shot. I really do love the idea of this. For ...

    Dec 18, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: First try at short story

    OK, this is my first try at a short story, and I find them impossible to do, because they all come out rubbish. This is a prompted story for homework, ...

    Mar 25, 2010
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Of Wild Flowers-chapter 1

    This starts off incredibly well. I can really see everything happening. One of the bits I found slightly confusing was when you said: The baby seemed to have stopped whimpering, ...

    Mar 25, 2010


I lingered round them, under that benign sky: watched the moths fluttering among the heath and harebells, listened to the soft wind breathing through the grass, and wondered how any one could ever imagine unquiet slumbers for the sleepers in that quiet earth.
— Emily Bronte, Wuthering Heights