Nate

Another powerful poem by you... that last line is great. Only suggestion here is to take the apostrophe out of "shirt's, shoe's and tie's." It's not needed. Anyways, this is ...

I thought that this was very, very powerful. It's one of the few things I've read lately that actually caused my chest to feel like it was sinking in. Very ...

I thought this was pretty good. However, you might consider changing "have" in the fifth line to "hold" and rearranging the seventh line to "No more blue I will be" ...

I like your use of contrasting; that is, contrasting the good in the song by Louis Armstrong with the bad of what you think is wrong with the world. But ...

It sounds very broken up right now. You have one rhythym going, but then you switch to another, and then switch back. There were some particular akward lines though: "Takes ...

You can definitely post whatever you want. For a synopsis or treatment, the best forum is probably "Other" under "Stories."

Exactly! A cookie for Smilyfacebkwrm! Anyone else got a riddle?

600's!? I'm happy if I can get past 200... lol Here's the link:

If you take look into your profile, you will now notice that a biography section has been added. You can edit it by clicking on the "Profile" button near the ...

EUREKA!!! I finally figured out what was wrong with the moderator files! Ya know, you really only learn when you make mistakes :)

They must definitely indeed ended up crossing. I'm just leaving out one vital clue...

Got it done!

Nope :) It might matter though if they were from Queensland or some other place like Venezuala. But they're not, so they are thus able to cross the river. Perplexed?

Well I'm slowly bringing it all back together. Any posts made after midnight EST of November 21st are probably not in the forums. But, I think that's probably a small ...

Well, we just had our first blackout ever. Not too fun, but it ended fairly quickly. Anyways, still some things that need to get changed, but nothing major. It seems ...