Nate

I really liked this. Reminds me of a 1930s mystery novel. “I’m part of organization”, he sputtered out, “One that’s a little short on money. Need some rich folks to ...

Haha, I actually rather enjoyed this. Tell your brother to keep writing.

I'm going to take a guess that this piece of prose is meant to mark the occasion of the Australian apology to the Aborigines back in 2008. Not everyone will ...

The sun has been shining all day, which is extremely rare for where I live, and the local swimming pool was calling my name... 8) Haha, swimming does indeed beat ...

Eight. Anyone who does less than me is the laziest McLazy on Lazy street.

You may be singing this, but if you're posting it, you should at least run a spell-check on it. Otherwise, I'm left with the impression that you don't care about ...

Sounds good!

Ten year olds walking around like that? That's more than a bit odd. In any case, you posted this in Non-fiction so I'll critique it. This is an article, so ...

Interesting plot ending; very Twilight Zone esque. However, at the moment, the story needs a lot of polishing. As Kyllorac pointed out, there are a lot grammar mistakes. And as ...

I think Evi and Lauren caught most of the story-telling and grammar snafus, so I'm going to concentrate mostly on the sci-fi aspect of it. The Setting The year for ...

Four for me, lol Just another quick note: There have been more reviews in the past 24 hours than ever before in YWS history. At the moment, there have been ...

Haha, interesting concept indeed, although it reminds me of a true story some years back. There was a young boy (about 8 or 9) who was diagnosed with cancer, but ...

This was generally well-written; it definitely seems like you've proofread it at least once or twice. Just a couple odd things I wanted to point out. Something drew her toward ...

I haven't read the rest, so I'll be concentrating mostly on the grammar. However, this is really, really short. If each part is this short, then why don't you just ...

Vox, how much do you care about this story? From reading it, I get the impression you don't care very much about it; there's a lot of spelling errors that ...