NICOKEACOLA

I did like how simple this poem was, and you did a great job with the rhyme scheme. I actually didn't notice it until my second read-through; it sounded so ...

I found the message behind our poem immensely fascinating and i really liked our use of rhetoric- it made me ponder on the message you were trying to portray and, ...

This was a lovely read I really felt it was very emotive and you used great imagery- keep it up well done. Just a nit pick... In the morning when ...

I've read a few of your poems and they are all well written and extremely captivating. Personally this is my favourite just reading it made me feel peaceful also I ...

Ah thank you that was much appreciated !

I was illustrating how love is the worst, due to its ability to promise so much yet then take it all away. Its an expectation and disappointment theme. :) Thanks ...

After re-reading it my self I totally agree the last lines were rather bemusing. I've also edited it a touche to try to make the 'four lettered word' less ambiguous. ...

This is excellent, it really grasped my attention and your subltle use of rhyme made it easy to read. I can't pick a favourite part I enjoyed it all! Keep ...

You have mastered the use of quick wit- the last stanza was particularly amusing. I also like how you break you lines in half; Lick the sun, ravish the earth, ...

I really enjoyed your motif of time. The repetition of 4am gave a sense of structure amongst the unorganised rhyme and rhythm which i felt really illustrated the sort if ...

Ah thank you I completely missed those errors. Though the first one you pointed out is purposeful in a way to suggest a disjointed thought patter or logic. I do ...

No. It does not contain an 'F' or 'C' A 'U', 'N','K' nor 'T'. Yet the moment it penetrates Silence transfigures the roughest Atlantic seas. Fierce- with elongated vowels, Self-indulgently; ...

I have to disagree with the above comment on your use of 'fuck'. Personally I feel that the use of the profanity give a feeling of the building up of ...

The young are gods. Their legs bare, skin smooth, breasts perked. When they enter the club the party starts. When they leave it follows. They have no boundaries, no limitation. ...