Myth

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Thanks for reading and critiquing. :D I didn't think anyone would. The story actually has a lot of twists to it, unexpected things will happen and there is a very ...

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Thanks for reading. :D I'm glad you liked it but I re-edited it all so you might have to read it again. XD I'm working on the next part but ...

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Thanks for reading. As this is part of the third chapter I kind of already described the fête and stuff. The setting is in the master garden (a very BIG ...

uh... its not a reapeated word... its her Clearing, like a meadow or whatever, a c-l-e-a-r-i-n-g Yes I know its her clearing, I was just say you don't really need ...

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Thanks for reading. I haven't read His Dark Materials so I don't know if my story is anything like it, I might read it now. The next parts not done ...

Mist lay thin across the clearing , giving the place a foreboding aura. Four strangers stood huddled together, staring in awe at the sight of the clearing . Despite the ...

Thanks for critiquing , I tried changing a few things to work with my story. More comments are welcome.

I'm not much good at critiquing other peoples work but, even though this was quite short, I liked it because it kept me interested throught the short scene. I'd like ...