Myth

Thanks for the review, I'll be editing the whole story from the very beginning (which isn't posted here).

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Splitting this up into verses would make it look better, and I also really enjoyed this.

Thank you! I'll check out the site and do my best for the next post. ^ window; he slowly squeezed his warm bun, wisps of smoke drifting into the air ...

Gosh it takes ages to read this, but the edited version is a lot better. Still no glossary?

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^ does this mean you’re from the UK..? lol :P I thought you might of guessed I was from some of my spellings eg colour. What?! Ever..? I think this ...

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Nice descriptions and it flows quite well.

Thank you Kay! I type too fast to realise my mistakes and spellcheck doesn't always pick up on some of them, I'm editting this right now. Thank you for pointing ...

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Er.. right. I'm working on the next part and I prmise it will be a very very long read and after afew more posts I'll not continue the story because ...

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I'm really glad you enjoyed it. The last part was a dream but its also a flashback an a vision all at the same time because she was seeing what ...

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