Myth

Additional comments are welcome as I'd like to improve on what I've written so far.

I borrowed the book and read a few pages last night. It was.. just not something I'm interested in. At college there was such a fuss most people saying it ...

The prologue is meant to appear ordinary and dull because its the real world and during the middle it changes to a different realm. I didn't want readers wondering what ...

Wouldn't this be in Writing Tips? I dunno.. Anyways, good job on stating how useful a gryphon is. Personally I don't think I'd use them for fantasy but if anyone ...

Thanks for reading! I chose not to reveal too much about Fred, his character will come out more later in the story as I wanted him to have a mysterious ...

I like the change and the poem.

I wouldn't want to comment right now on Frederick. Well.. Brenna will use some psychic ability in the next chapter or the one after that, depending on how much I ...

Thanks for that helpful critique. I did want the start to be an ordinary world because things get extraordinary once something dramatically change, just wait till I get to the ...

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He straightened himself up and started to make up excuses for his lateness, he didn’t want his wife worrying about him, it would only put him off going on further ...

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It's much better now that is has been edited and Phoenix has already gone through most of it so there are no errors that I can see. Write more!

Thanks for that Dono. Its all edited but I don’t think I’ll post any more for a while. I keep on forgetting to do the italics code as it is ...

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