Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = review * Letter Post "So do I," I giggled. "Would you like me to write Mum the note or do you wish ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * She twisted a piece of her long hair around her finger and looked at me anxiously. ‘piece’ is wrong, I ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * It didn’t matter that his features were blunt, wide cheekbones and deepset eyes. Wouldn’t there be a dash between ‘deep’ and ‘set’? Of ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The man looked up surprised and saw an old woman who was definitely not there before sitting on a huge ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I had been to the library after school, to take out said book, which explains why I was later than ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * The worst part is waiting for him to drive. He has to wait for ten minutes lest somebody else wants to get on. ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Our lives are quite hectic, chaotic, bizarre. Sometimes we do nothing, sometimes we do strange things, sometimes we wash our hair in the ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * His master was crouched over some letters, his good hand clutched the edge of the parchments, making his knuckles blossomed ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Karz shot his pretend air-gun at Ramwick across the orchard and watched merrily as his friend fell to the ground ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * [With a dull] slap, a pale hand smacked against the glass at the front of the vending machine. [With a ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I took a deep breath as I stepped [inside] the tall glass door that Valerian held open for me. You ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The house itself was [okay] too; from the outside it looked like a stately mansion that an ordinary person such ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The streets were covered with black ice and frost. I imagine ice and frost are white, why black? Is it ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Louis twisted his mouth in an amused smile [to himself] at the thought. Not necessary, but maybe take that out? ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Just an hour ago, Tony had been in a dark alley of downtown. I think the ‘of’ is unnecessary. Try ...