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I just want to say that the whole secret garden, heavy key thing has been done before. Haven't you ever heard of The Secret Garden? It's both a movie and ...

This chapter is very smushed. There isn't any room. You crammed every detail you could into four paragraphs. It's a bit of an overload. This story has potential, just draw ...

This is kind of a sad poem, but that's why I like it. You caught my attention, which is good, and you kept it. This is a good peice.

This is pretty good. I especially like how you introduced it. Now, I'm not one for philosophy but it caught my attention. I don't know if it's because I like ...

I like the descriptions that you use, in both this chapter and the last. And it's not everyday that you see a story about a gay romance, so that's good.