My-mystique-Eyes

I think it could use some punctuation and maybe different placing of the lines. It may just have been me but I kept stumbling over it, It didn't seem to ...

hey good poem. i think it could use some more punctuation tho it would help it flow a little better. :)

thanx guys, thats really encouraging and helpful. I've already fixed it up a little more, but i'll keep working on it when i get back home. Thanks. :D

Okay, you guys. I changed it...A LOT! But I really do not know if this just sucks more than the other one. I think it's longer than it used 2 ...

Yea, Well...I'm trying to grow out of this word. And I'm making slow progression. But it helped me to get all the hurt out, i think it's a part of ...

Thank you. It's nice to have a good opinion as well as one thats harsh, but pushes me to make something better. Sometimes, when u only hear bad reveiws it ...

hey everyone, thanx for all your advice! :D I do plan on taking your advice and fixing it where it gets messy and putting some effort into finding more poetic ...