Muteman

I'm criticising with the assumption you aren't that experienced in poetry, like you said. I would look up some modern poetry to get a better grip on the subject as ...

Like the above person said, it's hard to catagorize this, and thus is hard to critique. It seems almost like venting, to someone, or maybe yourself. Could be someone you ...

Oh yeah, didn't see anywhere else to ask this, so I'll throw it out here. How does one exactly get on the front page? I've seen a few things up, ...

Thanks for the criticism. I'm having some issues with the whole "bed of lies" part. I'm going to play with it a bit. And thanks for the positive review also. ...

The ending of the 3rd stanza is a little corny sounding, of course, it's hard to write a poem without a little cornballin'. But the whole 4th stanza is awesome. ...

Ah my first criticism, nice points and all, especially the father looking back one. And thanks for the uplifting too, can't hurt.

It's long, so just be prepared. Genocide B.D.M. Dedicated to the Armenians slain during World War I due to the Ottoman Genocide. The town I was born in had no ...

I usually don't like criticizing poetry, but for my first YWS friend, anything. Usually when I write, I find the paper very rarely, if ever rustles. Rustling is for leaves ...

Wow, I'm a major historical fiction fan to begin with, and this was quite skillfully done. As the person above said, need to get the comma thing down. And some ...

Steve the Goldfish B.D.M. Praise fish tanks, giving a nice visual way of forgetting him, (also praised) dying in the other room. Praise the fish inside. Trapped in glass, a ...

Sure, sounds groovy. By far the nicest bunch I've met on one of these. I'll probably put something o' mine up tonight.

A set deadlines I'll never reach usually. Personally, I find that when I'm stretched for time, stressed out, and just hating what I'm writing, is when I write the best. ...

Very nice, I like the use of more simplistic language. Can't stand when people through huge words in there. I especially liked "because if you did not believe it, we ...

Alot of nice poem language, patch, denim, slenderness, manic, for some reason all seem poetic to me. Liked the first two lines, why, I can't tell, most poetry is give ...

Oh alright, thanks guys(and girl)