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Re: Poem For Hot Days
A;right, good stuff, thanks. I think I'll slice and dice it today. Maybe throw in a nice metaphor or whatever they're called. I'm just glad I got something down, usually ...
Jun 10, 2008 -
Re: Poem For Hot Days
On Monday, when I came home, I dropped all my stuff on the floor. I went into the kitchen, got a water bottle, one of those holey containers of blue ...
Jun 9, 2008 -
Re: Wandering River
Needs more concrete details. Give us a name/place/whatever. You should make it specific as humanly possible, then hack and slash things away. Throw in some (VERY few) words like love ...
May 14, 2008 -
Re: I want to Critique, (I give very long ones)
Eh, only got 3 things up at the moment in the ol' portfolio, but take your pic I suppose.
May 14, 2008 -
Re: The edges of all things turn in
Having 0 reviews sucks, so here I am. Overall, I liked the the fact that you actual wrote a poem about something real and solid and concrete, not solely emotion ...
May 14, 2008 -
Re: Lord of the Flies
This book was great. I would say easily Top 25 books of all time. Maybe not up there like The Catcher in the Rye, but still one of the greats.
May 13, 2008 -
Re: The Logarithm of Love
Not saying I'm a poetry expert or anything, but going off the pros of the business, so yeah. I would focus more on the concrete. Showing us true blue images. ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: Jane Toecup
I'm assuming I know what this is about. But being a dude, I'm not that up to hype on that sorta thing. I wouldn't use "Mary Rose" so much, give ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: First Drink
Upon rereading this I got an idea. You could always turn this into a poem. Add some concrete images and the transformation would be pretty easy. Just an idea.
May 13, 2008 -
Re: confused
You just write in the topic in which they post their work in, simple as that.
May 13, 2008 -
Re: (Leu)kemical Poison
(Leu)kemical Poison B.D.M. “You, get out, I only want the stuff now” “Okay” The most horrifying composition. White flooring, ceiling, lights. The high pitched intercom. Here sound is thin, wei
May 13, 2008 -
Re: hey people
Yeah, I think I saw you somewhere else saying the same thing. Try not to flood topics with advertisements. But if you do like to write and whatnot, here's a ...
May 12, 2008 -
Re: Happy Birthday
Nice, sarcasm in poetry, if I'm reading it right. Just on the general outline of the poem, I would mix the stanzas more, as it's two even ones at the ...
May 12, 2008 -
Re: In An Instant
Well it's late, but better late than never. And it's not even a real criticism because it's a skillfully done essay. My cousin went through a very similar experience, I ...
May 12, 2008 -
Re: Hola y'all
Not really the greatest website, but yeah, here it is. Got a few pretty good authors and poets. Uhm, Tom Paine, and David Surette'll be there if you know them. ...
May 12, 2008
