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Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
I hated, hated, HATED The Call of the Wild by Jack London. I know it's a classic, but it just irritated me every time I opened it. To me, Buck ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: The Cigarette
There is one reason I really, really love this piece- it presents cigarettes for what they really are. I can't tell you how many times I've seen "cool" characters in ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: [removed by author]
Kafka it might be wise to read all of my posts on here before putting crap up. Thank you for making my decision on leaving final Before I saw this ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: heart of the rat
Thank you so much for the reviews, everyone! I'm definitely keeping the capitalization thing in mind, debating whether or not I should capitalize in this case... But I do like ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: heart of the rat
Oh yes, the lack of capitalization was intentional. I figured that a rat would have enormous difficulty holding down a shift key and typing a letter at the same time, ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: heart of the rat
A/N: I have no idea what to categorize this as. It was written to accompany photographs inside a handmade book. I almost put it in short stories, but nothing happens, ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: hide
I like that this seems to draw from personal emotion and experience- if I have one issue reading the poem, though, it's the rhyming. It feels very forced and unnatural. ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Clockwork
I really enjoyed this poem. It drew me in from the first stanza- however, I do think that a change of title may be in order; the first couple lines ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: The Music of Dusk
I really need to start coming on more often. I keep trying to remind myself to come check comments, but I just don't. Thank you for all the feedback, everybody. ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: The Music of Dusk
Oh, wow, I haven't been here in forever. But everyone, thank you for critiquing. Explosive Pen, there is a reason for the last two lines- the form of a sonnet ...
Dec 30, 2008 -
Re: The Music of Dusk
Thanks for the advice, Rosey. Actually... I wasn't thinking of Music of the Night. I wrote the poem in math, then on the bus I decided that the last lines ...
Dec 9, 2008 -
Re: The Music of Dusk
Night wraps its violet ‘round winter’s pale day With echo and shadow and absence of light. There’s a shape in the darkness, a flutter of gray And you shiver and ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: I just joined.
I wrote a sonnet in math class the other day, and I'll be putting it up here soon. So you'll be able to judge for yourself whether I'm good or ...
Dec 7, 2008 -
Re: I just joined.
Whoa, lots of replies. =D Thanks for the suggestions for my short story. I've managed to get a plot developing, so it's definitely progressing. The genre? I'm not even sure ...
Dec 5, 2008 -
Re: He loves me not
The last whisper from a child’s lips As fancies drift from fingertips These lines are what makes me love this piece. Every once in a while, I'll see song lyrics ...
Dec 4, 2008
