Munchkinzizzles

I think that was the edited version. Here's my suggestion: Expand the story a little bit. Get into the first chapter. Perhaps then, the prologue won't seem so meaningless. And ...

Here's the next chapter! Feel free to give constructive criticism where it is needed. Chapter 2: Mrs. Fortworth Mom and I were eating breakfast before church. Cereal. Apple Jacks. I ...

Can we make writing contests? And if so, which forum would we put them in?

Hello.

I'll post the edited version soon!

I'll edit this one soon. Sorry it's taken me this long. :(

Here's the next part. Chapter 2: The Strange Day It was the day after Da Quian’s friends had come over for the evening meal, and Da Quian was still asleep. ...

Here is the revised version! Chapter 1: The Evening Gathering Here I stand, his eyes afire, his tongue ablaze, his hands alight. And only over a simple mistake. “Shut up!” ...

Please?

Anyone other than Treem? Really, people? Is it THAT bad?

Oy! I'm working on WAY TOO many stories right now. I just get so many ideas...

Thanks for responding. I will totally let you know when the next bit is up. :) What did you think about the whole concept? Was it sort of cheesy, or ...

This is a story set in China a long time ago. I got the inspiration from a video game called Dynasty Warriors 4: Empires . :) Nerdy, I know. Here ...

I just wanted to be clear that my comment wasn't meant to be totally defensive, or rude or sassy. Some people can get pretty sensitive. When posting a harsh review ...

*This comment is not meant to be sassy, rude, or mean* I think that the dialogue is useful in my story because it shows that EJ and her mother have ...