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Re: Is homosexuality a choice or a result of nature?
I only read the original post and then the first few sentences of the next one. I want to have gone to bed an hour ago, but I just couldn't ...
Feb 21, 2011 -
Re: Uprising Ch.1
Okay, so. Awesomesauce. I only have, like, really little comments. First, I have no idea what time period it's in...like, I assume it's a really long time ago, because a ...
Feb 21, 2011 -
Re: Freedom Awaits: Chapter 1
I have read that. I loved the heck out of it. I keep recommending it to friends but they never get to it, you know what I mean. (But of ...
Feb 21, 2011 -
Re: Alpha Day Chapter One
You're inconsistent about the tense. She has a rounded face and a pretty straight nose. Her hair’s crimson red color appeared bloodlike in contrast to her skin "She has a ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Prologue
Okay, this was amazing. Very few things that I have problems with. SporkPunk already listed a few of them (and, SporkPunk, I just have to say that I really love ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Freedom Awaits: Chapter 1
Okay, so this is my first story on this site, which I'm new to. This chapter is extremely rushed, since my biggest problem (as far as I know) is that ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Avari
I'm kind of upset at you for making it so short. I've only been on here for a little while and I'm having a really hard time finding things I ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: UNTITLED - name still needed (part 1)
I couldn't read the whole thing because it's not really the kind of thing I'm interested in and it was a little slow for me, but it was better written ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: DELETED
It's kinda a bit much. I think it could stand to be stretched out a bit; it's a little too much information for such a little amount of text and ...
Feb 19, 2011 -
Re: Freaks!
Yeah, I like it so far, as much as I can, since that was so little. But you do have some run-ons and one time you forgot to capitalize (though ...
Oct 21, 2010
