Mr.Knightley

I think you have a good start here, LoVeLeSs, but there are a few things that caught my eye. I'm left wondering why the narrator is saying these things. Why ...

So the first thing I noticed about this poem is that, after the first two lines, you kind of lost me. Your opening sort of half-grabbed my attention, but then ...

Welcome to YWS, all! I hope/know you'll love it here! :D

So, I mostly liked this poem. Your contrasts are enjoyable, and it flows smoothly, for the most part. The only thing I thought was strange for me was the very ...

Lava, this was so hilarious! I loved how you described the evil teacher, and how it flowed from line to line. It reminds me of a teacher I had in ...

I never like reading poetry about something like this, because, for me, at the end of the day, this kind of stuff is absolutely pointless. I always think that, when ...

Hey there! :) Great, great work here. I absolutely loved it! While I read this, all I could think about was the movie Avatar, as it has a lot of ...

Hey, Blink! Great work on this one. I liked the story you told here, especially since it's something I would never think of myself. :P It's very dramatic, and paints ...

I disagree with Conrad, actually. I don't see your tone as demeaning, really, just kind of tired of the mistakes that you write about. You have a very short poem, ...

I really loved this poem, S.S. Rose. I especially like how every stanza was formatted the same, thus allowing me to focus more on the actual work. You have very ...

Hi, Kylan! I have to say I really loved reading this poem. The imagery you used to describe your setting made me laugh, especially things like "fleshy chandeliers." No matter ...

Well, I think you've written a terribly sad story, and it kind of distracted me at first. I used to have nightmares just like this about my own mother leaving ...

I'll stick with the short stories, thank you very much!

I never feel that way. It's impossible. Because I'm afraid I'll never get it to begin with! :P

Hi, empress! Thanks for your review! Actually, now that you mention it, it is a bit long and kind of awkward. I changed it, and I think it works better! ...