Mousey

Chapter Three Reina stood in the servants’ kitchen wrapping a bandage around her hand to stem the flow of blood. “So what happened?” She looked up and grinned nervously at ...

"Gosh does this woman ever shut up." Jeff thought as his new guidance counselor drug on and on. This sentence didn't really make sense, drug doesn't belong here did you ...

Thanks for the critique Matt, I've worked on your suggestions some things I've changed but there's one or two things I haven't sorry. "Stop it." --New line here?Reina let out ...

I normally do post chapters seperately except that I have a problem with my first chapter. I don't think it's that good but I sort of want to keep it ...

I think this is good but it has the potential to be more than good. I don't know why but I got the impression that Lillian was terminally ill, I ...

I really liked this, it made me want to keep on reading. I was just thinking that maybe you could add a small description about what a storm in it's ...

Thanks for the welcome guys, I'm kinda glad I have to crit other peoples work first because I'm starting to get nervous about posting mine now lol.

Hello everybody! I'm 19 years old and I'll be going to University in September to study for a Business Studies degree. I've been writing since I was about eight-years-old and ...