Mortality

This was funny. I think it was flawless and very nicely written until this part. Stanza by stanza, line by line, And so she wrote her poem, row by row. ...

I need someone to hold me. And that someone ain't there, (I think you should use "isn't" instead of ain't." ain't just kinda ruins the flow) Other then that i ...

Love is part of family and we move on We need their love to feel strong ______________________________ This part, the first and second line don't rhyme or flow very well. ...

I agree with Kenpachi. I read it and it didn't flow for me at all. Sudden stops, awkward words is what made it not flow well. Just an end to ...