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Re: Pass the Note
The hearts of the happy know nothing of longing they make me feel crappy their lovesick smiles i view Chorus: The past is full of pain the future filled with ...
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Re: Lonely Angel: Chapter One- Part Two
As she walked away from him and exited the stables, she reflected on the strange boy- for he was still a boy, although he was certainly tall enough to be ...
Jan 21, 2010 -
Re: Lonely Angel: Chapter One- Part One
She had been riding Sunshine out to her private place, the one place she could truly calm her thoughts and subdue her rambunctious emotions. She could see it now, the ...
Jan 20, 2010 -
Re: Peace in Solitude
This is really good! Just a few things I have comments on: First, The pain of loss love perhaps? Do you mean lost love? If not, then I recommend some ...
Jan 20, 2010 -
Re: Catching His Eye
I really like this poem. I think it is very moving. (But perhaps that is just because I relate to it.) I didn't really notice the words themselves much as ...
Jan 20, 2010 -
Re: Lonely Angel: Prologue
Kill. The thought banged relentlessly in his mind. He would not let his impulses govern him. I am not an impulse. I am the anguish and anger you have hid ...
Jan 18, 2010 -
Re: untitled book - Chapter 1- The Heir and the Questioner
Just a couple of things: The other two were Luke and Katie Blake, two of his most devoted followers. They had done many a great deed for him. Katie was ...
Jan 18, 2010 -
Re: Limitless: Chapter One (rated 12+ for fantasy and violence)
I really enjoyed this! I must compliment you on how quickly you draw the reader in. I would like to read more and find out why Darrell is supposed to ...
Jan 18, 2010 -
Re: my own world chapter 1
I really like the concept of this story. However, I'm not quite sure of what the conflict is. Are you going to elaborate more on the conflict in a later ...
Jan 18, 2010
