MoonTitanZan

Odd title to go with an odd story. I love stories that can underexadurate something, and you did that very well. Great idea, great narration. I won't bother going into ...

Great job, I enjoyed reading that. Only spelling error I saw was "wit" in the sixth to last paragraph should be "with" I believe. One other thing is at the ...

Giant, formless clumps of dark smoke hissed in their journeys from the their mother fires, ascending away from the horror below. Death stalked the ground through flames, swords, and gun ...

This is very good, thank you for sharing it! I especially like the rhyming since it doesn't feel very forced as most poems do when rhyming is introduced. For example: ...

Thank you for sharing this, it's very good. It's very well put together and every stanza works like clock work to one another. I only have a tiny bit of ...

I must say, that is how poetry should be writen. I've never read anything with so much character and emotion in it. I can't wait to see more work from ...

Great! Your expository stretches are very well done. Your writing's very easy to read and I realy enjoyed this piece. Your dialogue could use a bit of colour and you ...

It started when the lord of the land opened the red curtains and let light sweep into the room. The liquid sunlight descended like a cavalry charge from the window—a ...

Thank you!

I don't know why I made something so riddled, but here it is... In essense, it's free verse, but I don't know all that much about what I'm doing, so ...

That was amazing. I don't know how to give that a review, nor do i have time, but I assure you I've never read anything quite like that. Absolutely astounding. ...

Thank you, it is meant to be fantasy-like, and the broken table is a symbol.

Well said. Your poem took me to another place. I loved it very much. The only things I want to comment on is to point out some of the things ...

Wonderful. The poem is lacking rhythm, but I rather enjoy poems that establish that they don't have a strict rhythm. My only suggestion is changing "...catacomb of mystical confusion." The ...

Short and simple for most of it. Wonderfully pieced together. I enjoy your writing style and I admire you for being able to write something so small and simple. In ...