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Re: A Journey - Part 1: Memory ~~(Chapter 3)~~
I'm not too worried about the grammer. I'd like it if you guys could tell me which places in it are most confusing, don't make sense, and your overall feeling ...
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Re: Spite
Wonderful! I could feel the emotion seeping from the poem into my skull. I wont give a very detailed review (forgive me! :P) but I really did like this. If ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: The Greatest View
Amazing! Five out of five. I loved the idea. You made it so clear with the words you used. Unfortunately I don't have time to give a lengthy review, hopfully ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Tree of Vita (Part IV)
This is the last part, so congrats if you've read everything up to here. If not and you're starting at the last part of the story because it makes you ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: The Happiness of Sadness
I can somwhat relate with this poem, for I used to love the rain when I was younger, and I was miserable all the time, but felt somhow happy in ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Soulshattered
Wow, good job. I don't normally like this, but this is an exception. Normally it would have to be built up to greatly for me to truely feel this kind ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Ramblings of a dead heart.
Very brief, very fulfilling though. I liked the idea, liked the imagry. Though it could use a small bit more imagry. I loved the idea after the last line. At ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Tree of Vita (Part III)
As I stated in the previous part, if your confused at what's happening at the begining, its because this piece wasn't meant to be split into four parts. Try going ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: The Stars
*edit* *You changed your poem while I was writing this review, ha! Okay I'll add the other stanza to the quote, but I won't write anything on it, though I ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Pieces of Time
Good job, very strong imagery. Maybe even a tiny bit too much, since it get a bit muddled in a few of the stanzas. To start, I really like the ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Tree of Vita (Part II)
These parts are to read as a whole, but if you'd like to review the grammer, fly at her. But dividing the story into parts means that the intrevals are ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Porcelain Doll
Absolutely incredible. I especially like what you did with the violin strings ...hair the snapped strings of a violin, coiling forever backward,... It's as if her very hair is made ...
Jan 29, 2011 -
Re: Tree of Vita (Part I)
This is the first short story I ever finished successfully from a few years ago that I've attempted to edit. Anyways, it's very thick, and the point is not to ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: Silly Me
Great job! When I first looked at it, I couldn't get past the first lie because your profile picture is SO amazing, but distracting... I was VERY tired at the ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: The Toothpaste Tragedy
I liked this! Great, refreshing, simple. My favourite part is at the very begining Toothpaste & Toothbrush: Oh how I love you
Jan 28, 2011
