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MoonLitTragedy

  • Poetry » Realistic, Lyrical Re: Shoes

    I love this poem. The message of it stands out well and is perfectly conveyed. The only issue I found is some punctuation and capitalization is inconsistent. While poetry does ...

    Apr 10, 2017
  • Other » General, General Re: Fear

    Hello, Twenty One Pilots fan here! I have a few suggestions, but they aren't necessarily things you have to change, just things I would change if I were to edit. ...

    Apr 10, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Literature Re: The Fault in Me

    First off, I really enjoyed reading this. The word choice used is good, and the central topic is consistent. The only thing I would change is that punctuation is missing ...

    Dec 23, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Health Re: They Don't Speak For Us

    To start, I haven’t seen a poem with this exact central idea, so that adds to my appreciation for this poem. The grammar and spelling in this work is correct ...

    Dec 23, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Tie the Strings

    To start, I love the rhyme scheme that you used. I like how it varied each stanza, yet followed a similar pattern and included slant rhymes. At the end, though, ...

    Dec 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: [white clasped hands]

    I love this. From the first stanza, your imagery is amazing and a mood is set well. I like how you used words synonymous to others instead of simple words. ...

    Dec 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Emotions Evoked at the End of Fall

    I love this poem. I like how each stanza starts out with a bold line, that helps set the poem and stanza. I like the figurative language used throughout the ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Other » Narrative, Realistic Re: Mummy?

    This poem gave me chills. I loved it as soon as I finished the first stanza. There isn’t much imagery, but that doesn’t take too much away from the story. ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Automata

    I enjoyed this poem. Something I noticed was that a couple of the rhymes seemed a bit forced. I like the descriptive wording used in this poem. A suggestion: try ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Realistic Re: Stars and Galaxies

    I opened this poem, because the dragon-shaped poem you wrote was amazing, and I was interested in seeing this one. I love the description in this. Description and imagery seem ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Narrative Re: Dragons

    Oh my gosh. When I first loaded the poem, the words didn’t appear at first. When they loaded, I had to stop. The shape is amazing. I love the description ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Spiritual Re: Morrigan

    I’m going to go stanza by stanza, so I can try to touch on everything. In the first stanza, I already love the poem. I like how you have roman ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: What kind?

    This is an excellent piece. I think most of the emotions you tried to convey were adequately expressed, and the spelling/grammar was correct as far as I could tell. Something ...

    Nov 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Ice that Binds Me

    Hi there. Something I noticed that could be fixed or changed is that two lines in the first stanza end in “memories,” which is a bit inconsistent with the rest ...

    Nov 25, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Culture Re: Paint

    Wow. This is amazing. I feel like this sort of relates to societal discrimination that currently exists in the LGBT+ community. I love how you compared certain people to the ...

    Nov 25, 2016


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