Mizzle

Dude! Your last name is Valentine! I am *so* incredibly jealous. And, to your killer question, if it was someone I really loved...I don't know. Killing is not my nature, ...

Hi, Val! I love your username, honestly, just like I love this time of year. Ah. Chocolate. XD. Yush, it's all about the food, eh? Anyways. I hope you're liking ...

Oooh. I liked this. Nice work. Only thing...bones aren't read. :O They are white. XD But, nice job overall, I really think this has potential. I don't know how it's ...

Okay, hey there. Oooh! I know you! I've reviewed for you before. Hehe. Okay. Done with my outburst. So, I liked this a lot. I think Nate has some fantastic ...

Hello, MattJF. Nice to meet you. :D Okay, so, I liked this. But... It wasn't complete. The lines need to be tied together, right now they're like materials not yet ...

Hiya, Patatopie! Nice to meet you. :D So, I do like this, actually. You shouldn't capitalize words even if there is a comma before them in the middle of the ...

Hey, Sakura. :D Nice to meet you, by the way. So. I. Loved. This. Honestly, I did. The only problem was punctuation, which is very easy to fix. In some ...

Moksha, you're doing it again. Lack of understanding? Downgrading? We're trying to help you upgrade it, and I understand you thinking it can't get any better than it is, but, ...

I'm sorry, Moksha. You posted your poem, and therefore meant we would review, us YWSers. And we did, therefore giving you our opinion. Now, it is the writers (you) choice ...

Hi, Radid! Nice to meet you. Now on to the review. First off, I like this a lot. I actually like the use of dream, but that's just me. It's ...

Ooh. I'm a genius? Today's going better than I thought. XD. -Mizz P.S. Preschoolers are very smart these days. Beware. Of. The. Preschoolers. :O Bai!

Hey again, Moksha. :D I agree with Matt; your line breaks make this poem definitely hard to read. And, indeed, it seems like a thrown away shopping list full of ...

Hey, Moksha. Nice to meet you. I'm Mizzle, and welcome to YWS. You should take some time to go introduce yourself in the Welcome Area. Anyways. Kayla's quite right, Moksha, ...

Jame, hey, there. I love this poem, actually, a whole lot. So, yeah. Nice work. Probably one of the best works I've reviewed so far today...:D Cliche, but pulled off ...

I honestly and absolutely agree with what Ben and Dreamy pointed out. They're awesome critics, and they did a great job pointing out what you need to change. My friend...punctuation. ...