Misty

Ok you're doing a lot wrong here. Slipping between past and present tense, first person point of view, capitalizing stuff in the middle of was ridiculous. Get a grammar book ...

You can't base a story on dialogue. You see, writing is like giving touch and taste and feeling to one who can only see black and white words on a ...

Nyegg....I wasn't exactly creeped out, I was intrigued. I probably should have been creeped out, maybe I'm psychotic. It's very real, though~little kids are always wearing those skin-revealing clothes

I was thrilled by the beginning of this, very funny (the head in oven bit). And I so know about that eleven pounds that haunts you...I'm down to four! Hoorah! ...

I was really pleased when you made her average and frizzed hair like the rest of the *normal* population. If I have to read about one more ubergorgeous female I ...

I should not have jumped in at the middle, because this just confused the hell out of me. But I did read the beginning of #29 which seemed to be ...

This was a good short story. I was interested, and I didn't expect that surprise ending. I agree with everything Ofour said, and I guess I'm being lazy and not ...

I'm proud of you. Seriously. Proud. This is what I mean when I tell people not to slap their reader in the face with God. This was not only eloquently ...

I'm not so into this sort of writing myself, and I've never met anyone in real life with that kind of confidence. I can't really critique it, but I do ...

THIS IS WHAT I CALL IMPORANT, SO LISTEN UP Stephen King said something very important in an 'everything you need to know about writing in ten minutes' arcticle. You ought ...

I enjoyed this. It wasn't half so wordy as your usual style, but I found it perfectly acceptable, *far* from nauseating. One of my favorite things you've written in awhile. ...

I liked the story but you do need a new title, it was an interesting take on hallucinogens but the explanation at the end was most definitely unnecessary. :P You ...

Her skin pale and her blue eyes sharp with distrust and deep set anger. Should be "her skin *was* pale" Yet, the man took it stoically his brown eyes mirroring ...

Ahoy, Erin! I find your writing very quaint, and I enjoy it, but just as any beginner will find, there are imperfections. New writers tend to sway a bit toward ...

Ah, yes, Sam is totally right. It look so, so much better when you have correct punctuation, good grammar, all that. It looks so much better to just hit 'return' ...