MissMiaFacinelli

OK! Hi, I'm Mia, welcome to YWS! OK, so your poem is quite good. However, it could do with punctuation at the end of each line. All poetry needs this, ...

What if all secrets were no longer secret?

It's quite hard trying to get to any sections now that the quick links have gone from the frop-down menus, for example the "Fiction" and "Poetry" options have gone from ...

Good point... I might explain that in a bit. Maybe she should have given up? It's intended to be that he's been depressed for a while... I'm still working on ...

AlphaGirl01 ->> done!

OK! So, all in all, a really great poem, really sweet! It definitely reminded me of my friends! However, I did have a couple of problems with flow, there were ...

Please. Pleasepleaseplease! Before posting, please spellcheck! The word Prologue is spelt how I put it! Sorry, I'm a weensy bit of a stickler for spelling and grammar, and spelling errors ...

Why don't you know I know everything, and was just checking that you know?

OK! So this isn't a new ending, this part fits in between the wedding proposal and the wedding. It's still a Work In Progress, and it's a bit long, but ...

Sure, send over the link and I'll get right on it :)

Trish ->> done! Sorry about the delay: I went on holiday.

OK. I really liked this as an opening: it worked well. However, I would really like a little more information on Fletcher. What has he invented before? Why does he ...

Trish ->> will read now, review later, when I have a little more time. Promise!

When is your birthday?

I think the mods idea is good, however maybe also open-able by instructors? As there is not always a mod, but an instructor is, for instance at the moment.