MissMiaFacinelli

Firstly, welcome to YWS! It's always great to see new members! I really liked your poem - it had a good ratio of rhymes to syllables, and flowed beautifully. Your ...

W. O. W. What an awesome poem! I really enjoyed this, and when I read it out loud, I was pleasantly surprised by the excellent flow: you've got the balance ...

OK. So I liked the poem, and can totally empathise with your situation - I hate being forced to write. The poem did seem very forced, and although when I ...

Wow. This poem was totally unexpected - I was anticipating something a little different from the title! Maybe you should change it, as McMourning said? All in all, I think ...

Wow - this is a seriously cool poem! I'm not sure what happened to the rhyme scheme? I was really liking it! Make sure you capitalise at the start of ...

Wow! I really liked your clever rhymes in this! I loved the general flow of the poem too, I can easily identify with the character. I was out of place ...

OK. So, I was a little apprehensive when I clicked on this link. I was pleasantly surprised by the first few paragraphs, but from then on I lost interest a ...

OK. I lied your style of writing in this poem, but I wasn't really sure what it was about or where it was going. I wasn't entirely sure what it ...

Wow. I liked this poem a lot. The topic matter is awesome, and I liked the first person approach to it. just one little point: instead of long lines and ...

Wow. I'm guessing from your Location that you're pretty hung up on some guy, and this is your little tribute to him. I loved it. I totally get your choice ...

Wow. This poem was incredibly powerful to read. I really liked the simplicty of it, and the subtle use of rhyme - I didn't pick up on that until the ...

I know exactly the kind of spoilt princess you mean - there are lots of those in another form class in my year. I really liked this piece, and I ...

OK. First things first - great poem. Short and to the point, just the way I like them. It has an awesome rhyme scheme too, which I loved. However, I ...

Wow. This is such a great poem! It's so emotionally descriptive, and the repetion is incredibly powerful! Although I didn't understand all of it, I got the gist, and I ...

OK so this is an awesome poem, but don't forget one little thing: PUNCTUATION!! Adding punctuation makes sure your reader has a chance to breathe in between lines, as a ...