MissGangamash

Back again! 'her own dead corpse' - don't need 'dead' Didn't she use the last of her coffee in the last chapter? I liked the comparison between Ellen and the ...

Hey! I saw the second chapter in the Green Room so I thought I'd check out the story from the beginning. Right from the start I could tell you are ...

'I believe the road to hell is paved with adverbs, and I will shout it from the rooftops.' - Stephen King. This quote is the first thing I thought of ...

I don't exactly know what this is about but the vagueness of it allows the readers to decide. For me, this made me think of my uni house. Everyone I ...

Here for the second chapter! 'A little while later, Aron declared that he was tired, and headed to his room. Gwendl and Kylan soon followed, a grim look on his ...

Hey! I saw the second chapter in the Green Room so I thought I'd come and check this out from the beginning. As a first chapter, I feel like you've ...

Hey, I saw this in the Green Room so I thought I'd come and check it out! I haven't read the other chapters so I can't really talk about plot. ...

Hey, I saw this in the Green Room so I thought I'd come and check it out. Also, I love fairy tale retellings so I was intrigued. It seems odd ...

Back again! A little nitpick - you mention 'torso' four times in quite a short amount of time. I know it's where she's being bandaged but it just read very ...

Another much better kill. It makes a lot more sense for her to use the arrow already in her to kill him - and is also something that makes the ...

Another massive improvement! You've lengthened his death that was - what - like 2 sentences? into a whole chapter. This is needed if you're gearing up to something. Tiny nitpick ...

This was a much better chapter than what you had written previously. You are able to show more of Jerica's cunning - with her using the dead solider as a ...

Hey, Magebird! Glad this story is back! I haven't reviewed the previous chapter but I did read it. I didn't really have much to say when it came to story ...

Hey, Stormblessed242! A few nitpicks- 'his mind wandered a bit' - could be altered to 'his mind began to wander.' But that is also cliche so tbh I'd recommend another ...

I'm going to pick out stuff as I read. Women don't have Adam's apples. Also, it feels odd that Adam's apples are mentioned three times in a short space as ...