Mirasol

It's really beautiful. I love it. Has a soothing feel to it and the narrative element was well done. My favourite lines: And I felt unworthy to in the the ...

Nice idea, could do better on the language. You can maybe leave out the "seductive, sexy" parts because it's not really appropriate and incongruous with the rest of the poem. ...

A trick of mind, in the blink of an eye you are lost in time, you were left behind. Heart ablaze a bright green flame. You don't think straight, you're ...

This is really beautiful and easy to understand and I LOVE IT! I can really feel the love between the speaker and the grandson. Like helping everyone you can on ...

Nice quirky poem! Although I've never been in that situation before, you described it so clearly i found myself feeling your disgust and angst while i was reading that poem. ...

I love it. It's really beautiful and just like the category suggests, dramatic. I saw it all, daddy, I saw it all. I like how you repeat this line again ...

The bell rang, a sudden shrill siren that signalled the end of the day. Sighing deeply --partially with relief and partially with despair-- I headed out of the classroom. The ...

this is a beautiful poem that really speaks out to its audience. I like how you keep going back to the lines on her face and describing them as something ...

Really wonderful! i felt like i was reading jodi picoult when you linked the yellow line from the beginning of the story to how it is like the kid being ...

This is just beautiful. Really, really beautiful. I love the structure and I would really like to experiment with it sometime. :) [quote]Confining my emotions to sharp downward Spirals; /quote] ...

I like your poem very much! The structure and style is very similar to mine; in fact I even wrote one about unrequited friendship too! :) To, just the two ...

Lanky, long limbs cradling the air, warming it with body heat. Fine, fair fingers exploring the earth, shedding light upon discoveries. Ecstatic, expansive eyesight watching over every soul, uplifts s

Very beautiful. Simple and short but impactful. [quote]An image not one too many see. But not one too many wish to be. /quote] Why "but"? i think you should just ...

Love how you prolong each moment and describe it to the fullest. You could have added more strong vocabulary. [quote]I’ve wanted this for as long as I can remember…to finally ...

You need to describe more on the feeling of envy. Use metaphors, similies, more devices. You did a good job on creating the setting. :)