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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Pain

    Hello ZaddieCaso! I must say, first of all, that I really enjoyed reading this! Usually when I see a poem named pain, I expect it to be especially pessimistic, however ...

    Sep 2, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Ranger

    Hello qgadhia! Today I shall review your poem. So, to begin with, I would like to say that I quite enjoyed this piece of work. But I believe I have ...

    Sep 2, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Prologue

    Hello roon, fancy seeing you here ^^! I'm going to jump straight in to a review now, so here goes. The first thing that I spotted was this: An aching ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: Some short poems (Edited)

    Hello, again! So, I am going to write a proper review this time, honest! Righty, here goes: Poser I agree with octocoffee that “howl” doesn’t quite fit, I think “moan” ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: Forgotten.

    Hello roon! And wow, deep stuff. So, this is what I understand from this poem (personal perception): At the start I feel that the “you” is someone who is separated ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: They have spoken.

    Hey all! This will be my second piece that I've uploaded. Basically I had this idea one evening when I was out walking. In my head the idea was much ...

    Jul 23, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Beauty is a Beast

    Hello, I'm Carl, nice to meet you! I really like the entire idea of this poem, reminds me a lot of The Brothers Grimm! Okay, review time. 1st stanza- Wow, ...

    Jul 23, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Valen

    For our hearts are as cold as ice that makes us hateful and yet sensual, For we are the fallen enemy who finds passion in your sweet blood, For there ...

    Jul 22, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: me, myself and I

    Hey :), I actually really liked this :D. I like the rhyme at the start and end especially: There’s a glass wall "myself And I, from A lie," "Where I ...

    Jul 22, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Tales of the Blacksmith

    Hello all! :) This is my first piece of work, and is also coincidentally the prologue and first chapter in the first story of a series I am thinking of ...

    Jan 28, 2009
  • Lyrics Re: Our Death is made (Rock)

    Great poem, I love the ending :P . I think that you should change it to "Without my brothers i would soon fall" Rather than "have fall", as it should ...

    Jan 28, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Dragon Lord- Dawn prt 1

    Hello, I enjoyed reading your work, I hope that my review can be of assistance. Firstly, I think that the first paragraph is a little clichéd, it seems in many ...

    Jan 27, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Promise

    Very nice :D , although I have a feeling that in the first stanza it should be screams not screems? Also the last line of stanza one, “The trees are ...

    Jan 27, 2009


If you pick up a starving dog and make him prosperous, he will not bite you; that is the principal difference between a dog and a man.
— Mark Twain