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Hi Chelsea, Well you told a lot about yourself in a short-intro which is really cool for a writer.I can never think of becominga vegan.Too tough for a hard-core nonvegetarian ...

Hi tori( I know it's not your real name), I am new at YWS so didn't read your intro before.Anyways I am too fascinated by Europe,I don't know why, but ...

Hi lucy97, Welcome to YWS.I hope you'll enjoy a lot. I think your story was okay-okay.You don't use capital 'I'while referring to the narrator.I can give you a name after ...

Can't wait to read the next post.Complete it quickly!!!!!!

hi As I said earlier i like your way of writing and now youv'e become my favourite.Keep on going.Only one mistake: "Mei!” Obviously, Lord Da Quian had awaken." I found ...

Hi munchkin.. Your story is awesome and I appreciate your honesty in telling about your source of inspiration.You narrate it simply,it like comes naturally and I am still able to ...

Hi Sorry to say but I didn't quite like the story and the way you narrated it.The punctuation marks like full stops are missing somewhere.The story is good but you ...

Hi beautiful, A nice story and a brilliantly written chapter :D .I just have one problem, "This sickened me, that they thought we were so cowardly" You shouldn't use 'cowardly' ...

Hi Beautiful Doom There's one thing I can definitely say about your story that it held my attention all the time I was reading it. I have read many stories ...

Hi, :elephant: I liked this chapter more than the last one in terms of narration.I felt myself really there with the narrator.Nothing to nit-pick.Really interseting story.Keep going,jasmine.Please PM

hi, I liked the story but I think it was way too short for first chapter.I don't have much to point out but I think when you describe something it ...

Hi So long you have been reviewing me but now it's my chance. Well,there wasn't much in the prologue but has really aroused my curiosity of the plot.I am going ...

CHAPTER-2 A Ray of Hope :elephant: I wanna ask you one question. Only one. Who do you share your deepest secrets with? Mom? Dad?Best friend? But what if they all ...

hi killthelights The plot is really very interesting.I would love to read more and more.I really read it quickly so i didn't find any flaws as such except for: 'Smiling, ...

Hi, It is a nice story.But I think you have brought in half of the story in one chapter only. The climax is nice but you write really short sentences ...