MiaParamore

Thanks for reviewing my work and I will work on the characters. @demeter: The dialogue sounds a bit stiff in many places. When putting words into your characters' mouths, think ...

Nice one. Is Susan his foster mother?

Hi it's cool. The dog they had tested on had already had some sort of virus in it, when the cure and the virus combined , it created a disease ...

Done editing !!!!!!

Hi, I really liked the story and especially the last line. But I have one issue, why did you start this story with a dream in which dad was murdered. ...

Table top war game? What's that? Sorry to ask this but I really don't know.

Ya I know they help a lot.Ever since I have joined YWS, my writing skills have improved. If you can review my story then I would be grateful. Here's the ...

I am little confused about what this actually is. Can you just tell me more? What will be my role if I join?

Does no one wants 2 get dere work reviewed??? Hard 2 believe.

Hi, - Character! Helion (I like the name) is our hero, but we don't have any information on him. He wakes up and is immediately shoved into a dangerous situation ...

Are you kidding? Will you post only this much? Okay if you want to post this much only but atleast make your write-up a bit more interesting. If you edit ...

I did this, I did that, I gasped for breath, I cursed in anger, I wanted to get out, I wanted to stay alive, I cried in terror, I wouldn't ...

Wow Plennsterr,your narration style is wonderful. i totally fell for it. Shouldn't you eb posting this in Romantic Fiction? One Problem: You should write the title beginning with capital'I' Like: ...

Well definitely you haven't combined different colours. The pics cool but is looking raw.... I din't kniow how to express this but try to click it from some other angle. ...

Now she looks believable. She is looking pretty unlike the last one where sorry to say she looked like a demon !!!!!!! Keep drawing, I know how tough this is....