MiaParamore

Hi. Can you review this for me? It's the prologue and chapter-1 of the same story. LINK: A Criminal's Heart-Prologue A Criminal's Heart Chapter-1(OLIVIA)

I totally agree with Jagged. the tenses were a bit confusing. Just read it again and you will find errors yourself.

No one interested?

Hi. I found this part very boring at first honestly but at the end it became interesting. there are many mistakes and I can tell you only some because I ...

Hi there. I am here to review your story. The wind blew my hair in on (it can't come in your face lolz) my face as I climbed the rocky ...

Hi.Now i know is not Carly. So I also tried making Neytiri and you have got it right and have made it better than me. I don't see any flaws ...

Hi Clo. this drawing is original and funny. Nice idea. My nit-picks: I understand the person is super skinny but at least make the thighs a bit fleshy and give ...

Doesn't anyone want a review?

Hi. Welcome to YWS. Good accidents are rare and you are lucky to have got involved in one. English third language? So what are your other languages(1st and 2nd)? Enjoy...

Hi xxclaraxx(weird but cool username), So first of all welcome to YWS. Hope your this post turns out to be good. I will be copying your story and then edit ...

Hi Carly(if that what your name is), I like the drawing and I think you have showed us the perfect innocence of the little girl in her face.I have two ...

I looked down to see the Korth revolver close to me. You mentioned earlier that Korth was a person, so don't call it a "Korth revolver" because it sounds like ...

I am finally through with chapter-1. Here's the link for prologue in case you missed it. A Criminal's Heart OLIVIA (Chapter-1} 25th June, 2009 11:00 PM I have finally killed ...

No problem... take your time. I want an honest and good review so I will wait.

Hey can you review this: Seems like Eternity