Young Writers Society

Alliyah! I'm looking more at format than content, partly because I have a hard time following with the text moving and disappearing - but maybe that's also a limitation of ...

Alliyah omg. I love this so much. I will say that I prefer the text version vs. the web version you posted, but that's partly because I often find concrete/visual ...

Alliyah! I loved the version you posted for NaPo, but since you have this posted here I'll nit-pick. As always, take with however many grains of salt you need ^^ ...

Tae! So basically I love this, and all I really have are some nitpicks because dang. Talk about scathing (and I love your tag to this, too). Last two lines ...

Hi! Here as threatened :) I love your last line. The stanza above that I think is your strongest - it's definitely the tightest, though you still have moments of ...

So I don't know if this will manage to be an actual review, but. Yes. This. (I'm old and still trying to find the line, on both counts). But, this ...

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Hello! I'll focus on rhythm/meter, since that's what you asked about, though I'll touch on all three, since they're interconnected ^^ In the first stanza, you have two points that ...

Alliyah!

Hi, Blue! First, I absolutely love your last line, but it comes out of nowhere. There isn't any lead up to it, and the effect is a bit like a ...

Hi! Just a couple comments, here: there's a couple spots where I think you're overdoing your repetition - "the day you told me," for instance, roughly in the middle and ...

Fooooort. So I saw your plea on your wall and then scifi and Lauren said it was good and she's so right. I don't entirely know how to review fiction, ...

Hi Scar! So, I have no earthly idea how to review prose/novels, so forgive me :P So, question: cat sith? I skimmed through your LMS thread, and don't see an ...

Aley! Just a couple of nit-picks, here, really: one, I don't think you need "anyways" in your second to last line - it feels off rhythmically, and it gives almost ...

Hi Hattable! Your words sound pretty, but (and I fully admit to quickly reading through the reviews below) I do think if you're going for publication you need a bit ...