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This seems interesting, but I'm not entirely sure what the theme is supposed to be. Is it a story told form the POV of someone who goes to music festivals? ...

I try and go for a style that tells you what's going on without being overly flowery.

If there's going to be a love triangle, make both people just as likely to get the boy/girl. Let's take Twilight as an example. Classic love triangle. Bella has to ...

Here's a rule. The romance should actually develop. "True love" and "love at first sight" are big cliches and rather lazy. Romances in real life don't just start in a ...

What do you mean by "actively" using "then"?

The magic in this world is different. No one throws fireballs at anyone. Instead, magic only comes in the form of potions, (for example, a potion to increase stamina or ...

I'm thinking that the herbs are nearly impossible to plant in a new place: they have to be tended and protected from predation where they already exist, and the invading ...

The story begins with Danyil, a boy living on a farm in a remote village. The all-powerful Dark Lord sends troops into town and destroys his home, killing his family, ...

EDIT: Oops, I copy-pasted the wrong article. THIS is it. To make your characters believable, it is important to make sure all dialogue is natural for the character. Example: "I ...

I think that farmboy heroes could be cool. They just need to get out of the "Dark Lord destroys farmboy's family" plot. Or maybe it could be a different kind ...

I usually just slip in details as I go.

I removed my prologue long ago.

Write a story that you would read.

I've noticed this about both you and errtu2. Nearly all of your work on YWS is poetry, and it seems like the advice in this poem would work better for ...

That could look for repeated words and phrases. Obviously things like "the", "to", "at", and "a/n" wouldn't count, but it would be nice to find your "the rivers of light ...