Merlin34

I liked this. Like you said, it was a bit choppy, but it was clever. It felt almost... musical to read. One thing I would try to avoid is mentioning ...

I think one of the biggest rules for writing is, "Don't have an ego."

I like it. I find it simple and yet funny at the same time. Sounds like something a pint-sized philosopher would write. Little nitpick: There's no cure for cooties now, ...

I like this, but there are several parts of the prose that just confuse me. This paragraph especially. Like the previous reviewer said, there were some grammar mistakes. It was ...

I did notice a few grammar errors, but nothing too serious. I'll go through your first paragraph and bold bits that could be improved. “Melanie, stop,”I cried (1) . I ...

This was... chilling and yet beautiful at the same time. You say you don't normally write things like this... are you sure? It seems like your brain does all the ...

I liked this. I feel it captures to mood quite nicely. There's a lot of emotion. There's on continuity error I noticed, however. When the ambulance pulled up I looked ...

This is interesting. It definitely hooks me in and makes me want to read more. Who is the man she's visiting? Why is she taking the pills? One thing I ...

And don't worry, when they speak of the forest they mostly mean packs of wolves, and sometimes bears. Typically, a wolf will only attack a human if it is starving ...

No, I've never played D&D. As for why I made it, it was just sort of an impulse write.

This is just a little something I wrote for fun. Basically, it’s a look at writing through the eyes of RPG skill lists. Thought it might be kinda funny. Some ...

Hello, tRiCk. I think I'll review this here piece. (Funny, there was a member of my forum named T-Fox, who also had an avatar of Fox.) I liked this. The ...

I disagree with number 3. Sure, "said" should be the main word to use, and "expectorated", "averred", and other such words should never ever be in a book, but what's ...

*claps* This was amazing. You captured the essence of the original Norse myth perfectly. I really could not find any real problems. Question... will you continue this? Because as it ...

Karsten is one of the best reviewers on this board. I suggest you listen to her. I'd just like to add that constructive criticism (which is what our comments are) ...