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Great poem! My favorite parts were: The wicked blade held aloft, whispers death so very soft. and Your darkest dreams will never be, far from the truth as you will ...

One last thing that I forgot to mention, though: When you mean the difference between "showing" instead of "telling" you mean the difference between me actually doing the action istead ...

Jay :Thanks for the positive crit ,it really made my day. I was almost ready to ditch writing when I read the first two ,but yours totally cheered me up. ...

This is great! You should really elaborate on the forgotten tales, or dreams or whatever, because they're really interesting! Also, you should try using pronouns a bit more, 'cause your ...

This revolves around nature quite a bit, doesn't it? It's really good, though the rhythm is off at times. You should work on that a bit. Try reading some of ...

I agree with Eraquio, this piece, at times, does seem a little bit forced. Also, though I like the idea of trying to open the book in the middle of ...

I really liked this. Other than some nitpicky things like the rhythm, it was and is really good. Steps; blocks of concrete stone. Steps; on which I wait alone. Nice ...

I really liked this, I think you really captured the essence of the seasons in the poem. Maybe if you had gone on to Autumn and Spring using the same ...

I read this and really liked it! Okay, here's some of the problems: Mood: Personification: I liked your symbolism with the rabbit and the wolf. It made quite a lot ...