Megrim

Ok back for more! Typing as I read again. Interesting start, with the talk of electricity--sounds like it's a guarded secret, only for the elite class. I'm a little lost ...

I LOVE the first paragraph. Great way to start a chapter. I'm a little unclear on where she is, exactly, though I understand her purpose. She says "I got in ...

Let's see what part 3 has in store! Will it be a new character again?? Looks like it so far. Their gender isn't clear at first, though after a few ...

I don't have much to say on this one since it's so short. It seems more like a reflection on the events of part two than a chapter in and ...

Onward we go, and my general feeling for this part two continues: she's just so happy and everything is going well! Like I've said before, sure that's a wonderful happy ...

I enjoy Ana's initiative and bold personality. I also think she and James are adorable together, with good chemistry and plenty of flirting :P So far, though, it seems like ...

Off to an exciting start with the first day at this new school, and I love how nervous she is. I also love how she's the only girl in a ...

This chapter does a ton of character development, which I love. The highlight of this story so far is the juxtaposition of Ana and James and their very different backgrounds. ...

Typing as I read, like the past few. I like James and it's cute that she gets to watch his sword lessons. I am a little disappointed because I was ...

At the beginning of this chapter, I found myself pretty confused, as we're thrown in to this situation without any context. Being in first person, I have no way of ...

This chapter was fun and silly, with some good moments of humor. I think a lot of what I've mentioned in the past can be applied, about giving more specifics ...

Hi there! Moving forward, I'm excited to see what this school is like. Typing as I read for this one. Just outside stood a lady and two kids all dressed ...

Hi there! Finally here to review as requested. I'm surprised you haven't gotten any reviews yet. My only guess is because it's on the longer side. The writing seemed good ...

Here we go for part 2! Looks like a new POV and a new situation, so I'm quite curious. A few prose things to start. Some sentences are a bit ...

Ok here to catch up on the ACTUAL last chapter of part 1! This one is pretty short, and I wonder if it ought to be part of the previous ...