Megan1234

Wow, wow, wow. I really like this. "Cold, perky", that's really the only thing I can find. They seem to be antonyms of each other, not quite fitting well. Other ...

Thanks for the reviews, guys. Helps a lot. I edited a few parts of it, deleting some things and added more to certain paragraphs.

Wow, I really like it! Gives me a zombie/post apocalyptic feel with the father's comments and the gas mask stuff! Keep going, really good for 45 minutes! Perhaps tell us ...

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