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It's good that you've got a beat and some rhyming, which is more than I can do. However, there were a few lines that threw of the rhythm of the ...

I like the idea of romances more than I like the romances themselves. I've read one, and it feels as though I've read them all. Like Sam, I'd prefer them ...

My influences, hm? My influences aren't always the same as my inspiration, but they do over-lap. JK Rowling, Francesca Lia Block, JRR Tolkien, and Holly Black all continue to influence ...

Hullo~ I noticed you around and I thought I'd come and say hi. (I love your signature, by the way. That's such a great song.)

I kept waiting for this to get interesting, but it really didn't. I'm having a hard time even coming up with a review/critique. It wasn't, like, eye-sporkingly bad or anything, ...

Firefox. I'm not a tech geek, but I still prefer Firefox. (I love all of the plugins and add-ons. Customizable browser~ ♥)

Try not to start stories with descriptions of the weather. It's like an awkward conversation, where you run out of things to talk about. It's a classic stumbling point like ...

I voted for Harry Potter because it's the only one I've read and because it's my favorite series ever. I've heard Twilight and New Moon are good, but I've never ...

Ah. I interpreted that as more of a "you are Hermione's daughter" than "that is Draco Malfoy's son" sort of thing, if you know what I mean. I guess that ...

bviously, there will be some grammatical errors, but all that aside, I hope you all like it! Yikes, that's not a good way to get the reader's attention. There's only ...

I don't think you've introduced yourself properly, so welcome to YWS. I like how you use the line shape, and not just the words. It's an interesting, and underused, concept. ...

His name isn't Scorpio. It's Scorpius. Anyway, why would Rosie be told not to talk to Scorpius? I got the impression that, while Harry and Ron would never be friends ...

Speaking as a role player more than a poet, I don't think this sounds like something Snape would have written. I think the sentiment is right (more or less, but ...

Always. Even after all this time, ______ Your way forward is clear. We were talking of minds ______ And my soul. I shall never reveal the best of you. If ...

I think it's an interesting concept. Computer hacking wizards? Beautiful. That being said, I think there's a lot of things that could be improved. The dialogue seems stiff and unnatural, ...