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... the story of either the protagonist leaving home to go on to find bigger and better things; maybe leaving the countryside to go to the city to find work. ...

Granted, but "tomarrow" never comes. :wink: I wish I was going to be in the US when Deathly Hallows is released.

I used to wear a black cloak* and I'm one of the least mysterious people you've ever met. Or, I'm probably one of the least mysterious. I'm pretty transparent. Anyway ...

Granted. You do know what you want, you just can't have it. Ever. edit: Granted. The weather is excellent, but whatever you were going to do is cancelled and you ...

Granted, but it's Pepsi and you like Coke (or whatever). I wish I got a full scholarship to my top choice college.

Like Zen & Claudette said: tension and action. You can start by introducing characters or whatever, but don't make it a laundry list. Introduce them through their actions and interactions ...

Alas, a Google search has failed me. Is your book available online somewhere? or sommat?)

Anyways I suppose it won't be that bad. I will have Mer-mer (Meryl), Lola (Jessica) and Amelia (er … Amelia) to spend the summer with. And the randy Casanova, Monsieur ...

*cough* I'm back after ... several months' absense. :oops: Nice to, er, meet you. (Again?)

Eee , NaNoWriMo starts in 3½ hours here. (Not that I can actually start at midnight.) In the mean-time, I'm going to do as much extra homework as humanly possible ...

I see that now. I looked at the date, but I must've been looking at the wrong thing when I posted.

It's an early draft, right? So now you know, and in the future, it's something to remember. That's all.

Oh, dear. I'm sorry. I saw "next: NaNoWriMo" and thought you were refering to what you were going to be writing next. This is what I get for skimming threads. ...

His tears numbered more than the massive multitude of icy raindrops pouring from the sky. Okay, I'll give you more feedback as I continue toread your updated versions, but this ...

This is my third year. I won last year, but I didn't win in 2004. (Hey, I was in ninth grade, I don't really think I did all that badly. ...