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Re: All Over (YWS Lit Journal 2011) (Draft Two) (Obviously)
Hi there! I'll try to be of some help if I can. Well, this was a short piece, too short in my opinion. There was no defining climax/resolution, just little ...
Nov 30, 2010 -
Re: What should we call the Wall?
The VVall. xD "TheGreatWall of YWS" China will be so jealous :P
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Young Writers Literary Journal 2011
*squee!* This is a great way for me to cure my writer's block :D
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: The Traveler (Updated! 12/30/2010)
Hi there! :) She filled in the gap between us with just a few steps, and I wasn't expecting it, but didn't protest when she... -------------------------------------------------------------------------
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: The Traveler (Updated! 12/30/2010)
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Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Kicking Like There's No Tomorrow
Reading this story made me want to puke rainbows :) I think the story would be improved if you add more background to it, more development of her relationship with ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Winter
That was a pleasant read, I liked how the persona's age coincided with winter, alluding to the 'end'. It's certainly refreshing to read a story about love in old age ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Let's Say
Unique writing style, I like it! Admittedly, your characters are the kind of people I get annoyed with in real life :P 2 errors I found that haven't been pointed ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Letters to Angels (For the Holiday Contest)
Oh dear, so much for any constructive comments :P I really liked this piece, which also seems mostly without errors (I can't help you much with punctuations, teehee) It's an ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Winter Bloom [edited yet again]
Author's note: Hi there! Thanks for taking the time to read this :D It's been a long time (major writer's block) since I last wrote so pardon me if my ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Love
Aww, this is really sad and I hope your friend's sister gets well eventually. The emotions can be more strongly felt by readers if you lengthen the story with descriptions ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Octopus
I know I should try to say something helpful, but: This. Is. Awesome.
Nov 27, 2010 -
Re: Unrequited
Hi there, I haven't reviewed in quite some time, so bear with me if I sound amateurish :P I noticed 2 things you should probably work on before you progress ...
Nov 27, 2010 -
Re: What is the member above you known for?
For not being named after the Greek God. Technically a goddess ;) Known for being the last of the Paladins. (Dang, I'm good xD)
Jun 8, 2010 -
Re: A Criminal's Heart- Chapter 2
Hi again Shubhi! I'll get straight to the nit-picking, kay? (CHAPTER-2) JOSH BURTON 26th June, 2009 12:57 AM “Eureka! I have found it at last,” I roared with excitement waking ...
Mar 27, 2010