MeatBunCat

Past tense and present tense both make appearances in the opening paragraph. I'm bad with that >.< Though it's intentional in the self reflection, the character is both thinking of ...

%u201C*In public I%u2019m* Curse, *with friends I%u2019m, Maeve.*%u201D I know you put these in here on purpose, but why? Just curious is all. Shortly after it says "I could understand ...

When I put a post on my wall about a new chapter, I would go @Adler77 in some [spoilers], and you would find a notification for that post. Though for ...

Ah, I'll look into that. btw, do you wanna be alerted of later chapters since you seem interested?

nope

That's okay! I'm happy just knowing you liked it!

equipment reminds me of the anime/light novel Log Horizon I love the Log Horizon light novel! Never heard of The Gamer before. What's it about? The aspect of being able ...

Thank you for the error spotting, I needed that. As for the last line just means that some of them were cut up, some were burnt to death. When I ...

Stop saying %u201Cthis body%u201D %u2013 we get by now that it isn%u2019t technically your protagonists real body, but it%u2019s their body now so for the sake of clarity just say ...

I love the genderbend concept, but be careful not to accidentally put anything sexist in there. Huh, while I am sure I could be sexist, would anyone ever call a ...

Yay, my first fan!

Huh, I figured I trimmed most of that out already, beside the summery of how his life was working out, it goes straight into the all known game text. I ...

I'll take the silence as a sign I pushed you too far for info. Sorry!

Dang it! I keep editing it, it looks fine, but when I hit publish it creates these massive spaces again! Otherwise edited a bit based on your suggestions, and switched ...

but it's very annoying that the space between each paragraph is huge. Following your suggestions I will see about mashing things up. I've been reading so many light novels that ...