MeadowLark

It's always good to have a chapter in your story where there is no action, because not everyone's life is action packed day after day. Except I didn't think this ...

Phoey! I was really interested in this! A circus is so awesomeI I haven't read practically nothing on a cirucs, and here I found one and you aren't even going ...

This was pretty interesting and I liked it, but yet I didn't like it. If that makes any sense. I was a little confused at certain parts. Allison was being ...

This was for your english? Wow, that's pretty cool. I wish my english would let me write stories instead of stupid essays. But whatever. It was a really interesting story ...

Wow, that is one evil mother. That poor girl is gonna get tortured. But anyways... There was a lot of talkign, as mentioned above, and I thought there wasn't enough ...

I enjoyed this. It was pretty cool and interesting. I noticed a few mistakes here and there and if I can find them again... In the old tounge khy meant ...

This was a pretty interesting read. And I can't believe you just started writing in English like four months ago. So cool! Not much to say here since everyone else ...

Yea! Clover's back! I was hoping the next chapter would come be coming soon lol. I thought it was great. Like congrats to all the chicks there at the inn ...

This was pretty cool. Suspenseful and everything, but ya if its a vampire story I won't continue reading the next parts. Sorry. Vampire stories annoy me. But I'll point some ...

The description in your story was wonderful. It was one of the things I noticed immeaditely. Also, the way you captured the little girl's innocence and the darkness ahead was ...

This was pretty cool. It's always cool to read stories where at least one character can see ghosts. But I agree with Ms.Dream up there. You need a little more ...

This was very interesting and I enjoyed it greatly. Well I usually enjoy anything I read anyways but...I found a few small mistakes. ‘Take my child, he name is Cara. ...

Hi there! I'm not very good when it comes to criticing but I'm gonna try my best. First off, it seemed quick and I got confused at parts. I think ...

I enjoyed this chapter very much yeah, a lot of info dumping. I also noticed some mistakes so I'll just point them out to you: “I’m just worry about you ...

If this was a book I found in the bookstore I'd buy it lol. No kidding, I'm serious! Kingdoms of Chocolate and Vanilla, that's great. But poor Danny, like ouch! ...